Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that ex-criminals can become a great example and society in the long run, especially for the younger generation to avoid

crime

in the future. I completely agree with

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statement, and I will explain

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essay. The most compelling reason to hold my view is that reformed offenders can tell the real story when they lived in jail. In the first place, they can tell the main differences when society

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in their own house with their family compared to staying in a cell for a certain period of time. People will have limited access to health, leisure activities, and less private life which can lead to frustration and sadness for every individual.

For instance

, they need to sleep

together with

other prisoners which can cause anxiety because of less safety.

As a result

, teenagers will think twice before committing a

crime

.

Secondly

, people who have already been living in

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jail have low self-esteem because of their past experiences. They will feel uncomfortable when they have to talk in front of many audiences because of their previous experiences.

Consequently

, they will become more introverted than before. Another cause for my position is that reformed offenders might have fewer opportunities when it comes to education and job opportunities.

While

others can reach their goals to pursue education in several top universities and continue to have their dream jobs, it will be difficult for those who are already admitted to

crime

because many people will feel scared and endangered because of their presence.

Thus

, they only have small options available in the long run. In conclusion, I totally agree that reformed offenders can become positive individuals in the future for the younger generations.

This

is because they can tell the real story behind a cell and the drawbacks of admitting to the

crime

. Given

this

situation, it is recommended that parents, teachers, and principals should find the best solution to prevent children from

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the forthcoming.