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Some people believe that the history has little to tell us, but others think studying past history can help us better understand the present. Discuss both views and give your opinion, citing examples

#people #history
There is a considerable bias when it comes to studying
history
 or not. One school of thought,
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believes that
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 is past and it can never help anybody to grow
further
.
On the other hand
, there are
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a group
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 of people who believes that
history
 can be advantageous for
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the present
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 and future as well.
To begin
 with, there are many instances where it is not evident about the accuracy of past events.
This
 may be
due to
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a lack
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 of resources which could validate the correctness of any event in past. In
such
 scenarios, we cannot come to any conclusions in present.
For instance
, when we study
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various wars that happen in past,
due to
 lack of proper
evidences
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evidence
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, we cannot do anything about it nor it has anything to do with in present.
On the other hand
, from
history
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 people can learn lots of things and can make
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the most
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 out of it in present. There are many great inventions that happened in past from just an idea. Discussing
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 in present is important, as it can motivate people to develop and innovate alike inventions ignoring past mistakes. In conclusion, I believe that studying
history
 can be beneficial in many ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insights
  • progression
  • values
  • beliefs
  • heritage
  • identity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • subjective
  • practical
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