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Some people belive that robots are very important to human’s future development, while others believe they are dangerous and negatively affect society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #belive #robots #human’s #future #development #society
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the
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effect
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some people think
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robot s
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 are very important in the future . On
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 hand , if they too much abuse make people
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lazy to do something and
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if we produce
robot
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 kind of some
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 will be dangerous and
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people because if like some problem when
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kids
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the machine will
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. It does not mean the person can not use the
robot
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me
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, I do not prefer we use the
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bed call the machine come and to do something for them.
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Finally
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 mine , so just do not abuse and make your life gonna be boring . On
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, I believe everyone can use that
robot
 when they really need it.
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