You recently purchased a fitness program online which did not help you lose any weight. Write an email to the fitness instructor in about 150-200 words. Your email should include the following things: • Mention when and where you bought this course • Describe why you were disappointed • Urge the instructor to remedy the situation

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Dear Mr. Williams, The purpose of my writing today is to lodge a complaint about your online training program.

To begin

with, I have been following your successful career for 10 years already since you won Mister Olympia worldwide championship in 2010.

Due to

I have decided

to begin

my own body transformation, I bought the "Fitness Model by 4 week" training course online on your personal website on April 21st. After five weeks of intensive training, I started to feel annoying pain in my back.

Moreover

, I can't describe how I was shocked

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when I have seen my weight on

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display; It became much higher than was before. Based on what I have provided you today I may suggest a few options to solve

this

problem. I will insist on getting my payment back

together with

the fee for the online purchase. Alternatively, I suppose providing a diet course for free will be fair enough in that awful situation. I am looking forward to seeing how my suggestions translate to prompt actions from your side. Your kind cooperation would be most appreciated. Sincerely, Olga Ivanova.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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