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Some people prefer to work hard to earn more but have no free time while others want to have a free time but earn less Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Certain
people
 enjoy working hard and making more money at the expense of having their personal
time
while
 others are of the opinion that they rather have spare
time
 and receive a lesser income.
However
, I feel that too much hard
work
 would be detrimental to the entire well-being of an individual. On the one hand, There are a lot of benefits that
people
 can enjoy from having their own relaxation
time
.
Firstly
, They will be more reproductive.
For instance
, A study carried out by a medical department in the United States of America shows that the brain is more active when its allowed to rest for a
while
therefore
 a company will benefit more from its staff by allocating some hours or days off to them.
Additionally
, it promotes healthy bonds among families. Most individuals are so busy with
work
 that they barely have
time
 for their kids, availability of
time
 will give children an opportunity to spend
time
 with their parents which in turn will promote a wholesome generation and by extension a healthy society.
On the other hand
, Having access to more money means comfort and being able to afford certain types of luxury though it's at the disadvantage of the physical and mental health of the person involved. Asserting too much pressure on oneself will lead to both mental and immune system breakdown.
Furthermore
, It can make one easily irritable. Overworking can make a person's mind dull and his/her
work
 to be full of mistakes. To illustrate, Research was done to ascertain between
people
 who stay awake reading all night to pass an exam and
people
 who make out
time
 to rest in between, which set was more successful in their exams, they found out that the majority of the A students were those who found
time
 to sleep for a
while
. In conclusion, some
people
 prefer hard
work
 and earning more cash at the detriment of their health, I feel strongly that the merits of choosing our health over money far outweigh its demerits.
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