People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are the main problems people in cities face ,and how can these problems be tackled?

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Massive problems are becoming increasingly common among individuals who live in the big cities.
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is a consequence of overcrowding and poverty, I believe that governments can undertake effective measures to address or at least
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principal causes that can lead to problems in the
city
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is overcrowding.
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is because
people
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who stay in the
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desire to have their own cars as they are more convenient to travel or to commute
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and market any time .
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, the number of accidents may increase on roads.If the number of cars
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less,
people
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would not worry about happening accidents which
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on
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road .
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some of
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people
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the people
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who
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from
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the countryside
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to
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city
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the city
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are stricken by poverty .
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reason is that the
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of products in the
city
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is very expensive .
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,in turn, can lead to
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the
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proportion of poor
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in the
city
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. To
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find solution ,governments should encourage
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to use public
transportations
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transportation
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. Because public
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transport
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can hold more
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.It can lead to reduce overcrowded
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retail outlets should reduce the
price
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of items.The reason is that they put the
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they desire on the products. Poor
people
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suffer to meet their needs
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as clothes,
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and foods
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foods
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.So the authority should
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to
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vendors
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items.
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up
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although
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overcrowded areas and poverty are serious issues in the
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,
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steps are
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in
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the situation will surely
imrove
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improve
in the coming years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolis
  • commute
  • public transportation
  • gridlock
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • expensive housing
  • exorbitant prices
  • work-life balance
  • recreation areas
  • parks and gardens
  • criminal activities
  • security measures
  • density
  • neighborhood
  • public amenities
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
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