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Many people no longer read newspapers or watch TV news programmes. Instead they get news about the world from the Internet. Is this a positive or negative development

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In recent years,
internet
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 has been
attacted
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attached
attracted
attacked
 the general
pubic’s
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public’s
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 attention. There are some
people
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who beleive
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beleive
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believe
 that finding information about the
socierty
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society
by
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 a click
a
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mouse will
has
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have
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 more
benefit
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 rather spend lots of
time
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watch
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watching
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news
 programmes on TV. In my part, I agree with
this
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This
 essay will give some reasons to support my view. On the one hand, there are some
people
say
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who say
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 that the best way
for
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to
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 get
news
are
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is
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 spend
long
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time
 for
read
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reading
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 the newspaper or watching TV
news
 programmes.
Firstly
, I saw,
people
 must pay money
for
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to
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 buy newspaper every
day
,
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 because they do not want to miss any newspaper; But that the trash from paper
increase
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increases
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 more and more, it
impact
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impacts
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to
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apply
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the
invironment
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environment
.
Secondly
, all
people
 do not have free
time
for
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to
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waiting
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forwaiting
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 the
news
 on the TV every
hours
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hour
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, it
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is unconvinient
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unconvinient
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inconvenient
convenient
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on
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them
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their
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 work or
do
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doing
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 anything.
On the other hand
,
these
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this day
these days
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day
,
the
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apply
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society is developing
day
 by
day
, so the internet can
aprroach
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approach
 by
people
are
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easily
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. many
human
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humans
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beleive
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believe
 that search information
by
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apply
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online
so
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is so
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convinent
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convenient
. On top of that,
people
 can save
the
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apply
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time
 , lieu of we spend
the
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time
 for waiting, we can search it on the
internet
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Internet
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 when we need
everywhen
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it everywhen
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. One important
of
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that is
aslmost
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almost
people
 have
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a smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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 or
laptop
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laptops
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, so they can use
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it for
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for
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to
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 get
news
 online everywhere;
And
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with the headphone in hand,
people
 just hear the
news
while
 they are on the bus or walking.
Other
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Another
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 reason for why it has lots of
benefit
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benefits
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, example: when
some one
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someone
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 read some useful
news
 they can share it
for
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with
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 them member
in
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of
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family
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 or someone else. More than that, In short, from what has been discussed above. The
news
are
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is
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update
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updated
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everyday
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every day
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,
people
 will choose the best way
is
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apply
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fastest to get it,
that
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which
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 is
postive
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positive
 development. But
people
 have two ways
for
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to
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 get
news
 if they see they
the
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have the
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 most
of
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apply
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benefit. The
goverment
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government
 should have
further
 more information to support
this
 issue.
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