"Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience."

"In recent years,
homework
has
attacted
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attracted
the general public's attention. Some people believe that
school
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children
should not be given
homework
by their teachers,
whereas
others argue that
homework
plays an important role in the education of
children
. After
through
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consideration, for my
part
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I partly agree with
this
idea
.
This
essay will give reasons to support both views. On the one
hand
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there are some reasons to support the
idea
that Some people believe that
school
children
should not be given
homework
by their teachers,
whereas
others argue that
homework
plays an important role in the education of
children
.
Firstly
,
to day
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today
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student
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students
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go to
school
everyday
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, they learn
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subject
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in the morning and afternoon too, so they must spend a lot of
time
to study
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with
teacher
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the teacher
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, they will be tired and do not have free
time
to relax. Almost
student
go back home after 5 pm and
then
they just have
time
for individual and dinner,
then
they quickly
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to do
homework
, you know, they go to sleep so late and it
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to
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them
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health and quality
life
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of life
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. They feel stress more than if they have
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no
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free
time
to relax
time
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Almost parents want
them
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their
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children
grow
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up both knowledge and health.
Secondly
, if the teacher must give
homework
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to
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student
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a student
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everyday
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and
next
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the next
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day they must spend
time
for check
homework
and it
affect
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to
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the
time
for
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lesson,
instead
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school
and check it after they finish
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the lesson
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,
student
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will remember faster.
On the other
hand
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there are some reasons against the statement
that
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Some people believe that
school
children
should not be given
homework
by their teachers,
whereas
others argue that
homework
plays an important role in the education of
children
. On top
that
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of that
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, must learn with practice, so after
the
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school
student
must do
homework
at home, do
that
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to remember
lesson
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they learned. One important reason is that
normaly
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normally
they usually play
game
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so
them
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their
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parents want
they
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them
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do
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to do
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homework
instead
do other things
out
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. All in all, from what has been discussed above. it would be very difficult to evaluate whether
this
idea
is reasonable or not. And it is still a controversial issue. In my opinion, I am in favour of both sides of
this
idea
. The government should have
further
consideration on
this
issue."
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  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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