The table below gives information about UK independent and Republic of Ireland films by genre 2012.

The table below gives information about UK independent and Republic of Ireland films by genre 2012.
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The provided chart illustrates the amount of data about separate types of movies which were delivered between the UK and the Republic of Ireland in 2012.
Overall
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, both drama and documentary genres took up the largest quantities more than other films
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, as well as the rate of consequence which was expended to watch by the audience,as well as the rate of consequence which was expended to watch by the audience,
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as well as
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the rate of consequence which was expended to watch by the audience,
as well as
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the rate of consequence which was expended to watch by the audience was comedy.
To begin
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with, most people were concerned a little about biopic movies when its rate accounted for 0.7%.
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, the drama and documentary recorded the highest and most similar quantities which made up 23.6% of the total releases.
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, the second rank was comedy type when it only was lower than both drama and documentary. Turning to the percentage of income for selling tickets,
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a significant number of tickets sold, accounting for 45.4% of the total ticket sales and generating the highest revenue.
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, horror films
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gained a lot from the rest of other kinds of movies with more than 20%.
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, the part of romance just only 0.8%
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