The line graph provides information about the changing of inhabitants in three different of provinces of Oregon, the USA over the period in question.

The line graph provides information about the changing of inhabitants in three different of provinces of Oregon, the USA over the period in question.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph provides information about the changing of inhabitants in three different of provinces of Oregon, the USA over the period in question.
The given line graph represents the
population
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change in three different
region
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of Oregon from 1940 to 2000.
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, the most crowded county was
Washington
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for the period of 60 years, and
other
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provinces: Columbia's and
Yamhill
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's
population
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increased slowly and showed similar features over time. In 1940,
Washington
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's inhabitants were nearly 75
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thousands
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thousand
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and
increased
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gradually
for
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over
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next
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30 years. The
population
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of
Washington
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was roughly three times higher than its closest counterpart which was
Yamhill
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,
then
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inclined rapidly from 1970 to 2000. Eventually,
Washington
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's inhabitants reached well over 240
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thousands
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of individuals, which was a peak, in 2000. County of Colombia and
Yamhill
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had quite similar
trend
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during
60-year
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a 60-year
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period.
Yamhill
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's
population
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slightly increased to 45
thousands
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of people in 1970,
whereas
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Colombia's
population
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only increased by 5
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thousands
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citizens and reached just over 30
thousands
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of individuals.
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, in the next 30 years, both
Yamhill
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and Colombia approximately doubled
its
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population
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and reached 90 and 75
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thousands
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thousand
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respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, washington, yamhill, thousands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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