The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavent.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavent.
The chart
give
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information about how many
percent
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per cent
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of
people
in five Australian cities have
the
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had the
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habit of purchasing and drinking
coffee
and tea in
last
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the last
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4 weeks.
Overall
, as we can see, Melbourne and Hobart have the highest
percentage
of drinkers
in
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apply
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going to cafes for
a
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apply
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coffee
or tea, and
Sydney
has the highest
percentage
in
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of
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buying fresh
coffee
. It is easily apparent that Hobart has the greatest
percentage
of residents who buy instant
coffee
which is just a little under 55% and slightly higher than Brisbane.
Moreover
, the residents of
Sydney
have the lowest
percent
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in
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of
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consuming instant
coffee
which is merely a little over 45%.
However
, the greatest
percent
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per cent
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of
people
who buy fresh
coffee
goes to
Sydney
which
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apply
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was approximately 44%, slightly lower than
Sydney
's
citizens
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citizens'
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fresh
coffee
consumption. In Adelaide, around 50
percent
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per cent
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of
people
use instant
coffee
which is considerably much higher than the consumption of fresh
coffee
, in one contrary, is slightly higher than going to cafes. In Melbourne, around 64% of residents prefer going to cafes which is significantly greater than the
percentage
of
people
who purchase fresh
coffee
which is about 43%.
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