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Prevalence, new cases and deaths from HIV/AIDS, World, 1990 to 2019

The chart above represents the
number
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 of people who survived, died, and got infected by
HIV
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/AIDS around the world throughout a roughly three-decade timeframe.
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, it is obvious that governments were following the right policy. In a holistic view, the figure for
deaths
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 from
HIV
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/AIDS and new
cases
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 of infection decreased significantly,
while
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 the world population was increasing.
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, thanks to the advances in medicine, a large proportion of patients were able to continue their lives. It is vividly evident that
deaths
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 and the
number
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 of new
cases
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 infected by
HIV
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 were following similar patterns. The total
number
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 of
HIV
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 patients rose rapidly in the first decade; the
number
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 of new
cases
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 reached its peak (approximately 3.2
million
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cases
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) in around 1996, and
deaths
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 dramatically peaked at roughly 1.7
million
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 in 2005.
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, both of them
finally
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 showed downward trends afterwards. The chart
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 demonstrates that despite the growth of approximately 20
million
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 in the figure for people living with
HIV
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 between 1990 and 2000, there was a slight plateau for the next decade ( about 2.7
million
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),
due to
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 the simultaneous increase in
deaths
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 from
HIV
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 in that decade.

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