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Computers are being used more and more in education and so there will soon be no role for the teacher in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#computers #education #role #teacher
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Nowadays, it is extremely common that schools and universities are becoming to use
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 in an educational mood, but
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 reason, the role of a
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 less important. I completely disagree with that statement and
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 essay will explain my point of view in detail. On the one hand, in recent times,
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 have been used to teach.
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,
people
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 can learn in a different way from before. But the fact is that
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 do not replace the position of a
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 because they need a person who could explain.
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, teachers were trained for years to accompany their students and they are capable to answer
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. A computer does not understand the student's behaviour and it is not prepared to give support.
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,
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 are a faster form to obtain information and make education more entertaining.
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,
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 can watch movies or listen to
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 to have a better understanding.
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, with
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 kind of education
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 is more interested in learning because they acquire new knowledge without much study. But all the information that
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 a computer is excessive.
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, it is important to have a
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 who guides
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 where they can obtain the information they need to study.
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, the use of
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 for education complements the role of teachers. In my opinion, the best method to learn is always with the help of a
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 because they guide
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people
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 in the correct way to have success in their studies.
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