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FEW PEOPLE DEVOTE TIME TO HOBBIES NOWADASY.SAY WHY YIU THINK THIS IS THE CASE AND WHAT EFFECT THIS HAS ON THE INDIVIDUAL AND SOCIETY IN GENERAL

#people #time #hobbies #nowadasy #yiu #case #effect #society
Nobody can live without
practcing
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practising
favourite
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their favourite
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 sport, reading
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a preferrable
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preferrable
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preferable
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 book, playing on
musical
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a musical
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 instrument or enjoying
swim
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a swim
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. If these
last
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part
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are part
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 of your life but not a job, it means you have a wonderful
hoppy
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hope
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 and
keep
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keeps
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doing
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itdoing
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.
Although
hoppies
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hippies
shoppes
 are very important to society, not all people are ready to do and spare time for it. Hoppy changes your mode easily,
however
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 most of the time we don't have enough energy to practice it. In terms of improving mental health, the solution will be in the hoppy.
While
 someone is walking without reason but
jus
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just
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 because he likes it, every bad idea will go and be replaced with
vivde
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vivid
video
 images cultivated in his mind. Don't be shy because you have fun
in
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apply
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doing things
out
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outside
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 of your job. Be proud of doing it now or later. I remember that day of sharing activities with others and how
this
 changed their life and treatment with me. I am going outside now to meet new friends and start new discussions.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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