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If a product is good and meets customer needs, then people will buy it and advertising is unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

#product #customer #people
In
this
 modern era,
Advertisements
 play a pivotal role
on
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 the world market. Even though some
claims
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claim
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 that commercial ad is unnecessary for the
products
 which
in
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are in
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 demand
of
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by
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customer
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the customer
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. I partly agree with
this
 opinion. In contemporary society, there is immense competition in advertising goods and
products
 because of the globalization of the media.
However
,
There
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 are many kinds of
products
 in
this
 world, some of which
such
 as drugs, fruits and vegetables always meet customer needs without the need for adverts. To elucidate, if
products
 are essential for consumers
then
people
 will continue to buy
it
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 without
advertisements
.
By contrast
, we can not deny that
this
 time
people
 follow the same media, so marketing has an influence on
people
 when they decide to buy
products
. In fact,
people
 always buy
products
 because of interest in the
advertisements
. Even some vital
products
 use
advertisements
 to have an opportunity to increase
the
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sales
.
This
 shows that the
advertisements
is
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 profitable.
Furthermore
, most
advertisements
 using celebrity endorsements lead to high
sales
.
For example
, the same quality product from a different brand tends to have the same benefits for the customer,
however
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 not all
of
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products
 can reach the
sales
 target
according to
 different amounts of investment in marketing plans. In conclusion, I do not totally agree that
people
 always buy necessary
products
 regardless of
advertisements
; I think
this
 portion is a small part of perishable goods.
Advertisements
 are still important in
this
 modern world and most
people
 habitually buy
products
 because of them.
Consequently
,
advertisements
 contribute to the
sales
 of
products
 even of goods that customers always need.
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