The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.)
The table illustrates two different years of manufacturing which shared the worldwide phone markets of several companies in 2005 and 2006. The figure is given in percentage.
Overall
, there are many bands of phone production
such
as Nokia, Motorola, Samsung, Sony Ericsson, LG, BenQ and others. The data has shown that 2 years of sales had stabled, which 3 top ranked were Nokia Motorola and Samsung respectively in both 2004 and 2005.
Additionally
, the least popular market share was BenQ Mobile in the same period. On the whole,many companies especially in the first and second
well known
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markets were increasing much more percentage of sales by 3% - 4% increasing, which the percentages of those companies were combined to be more than
a
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half of
wholesalers
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and Nokia was reaching rather than a quarter continuously.
However
, Samsung, Sony Ericsson and LG were stable as a middle market of mobile
phone's
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phones
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popular.
As a result
, other bands were dropping sales including BenQ Mobile which had
been
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decreased almost
a
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half of the early years.
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