The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.)
The given table portrays data about the percentage
share
of mobile phone companies from 2005 to 2006.
Overall
, Nokia contributed the largest proportion of market
share
,
while
BenQ Mobile was the least significant
in
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between 2005 and 2006. From the data, Nokia accounted for 32.5% of
market
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share
in 2005, and slightly increased by 2.5% to 35% in 2006.
Then
, Sony Ericsson, which was 6.3% in 2005 and gradually grew to 7.4% in 2006.
However
, Motorola, which was 17.7% in 2005 had a significant growth to 21.1% in 2006.
On the other hand
, L.G was deceased almost the same amount in one year, from 6.7% in 2005 to 6.3% in 2006. Samsung and the
others
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mobile phone brands were slightly
deceased
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decreased
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from 12.7% and 19.2% in 2005 to 11.8% and 16.2% in 2006 respectively.
Although
BenQ Mobile, which comprised
a
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4.9% of
market
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share
in 2005, had a
dramatically declined
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by 50% to 2.4% in 2006.
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