The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004.

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The charts and graphs illustrate the average use of

water

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in the year 2004 in Australia.

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water

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consumed in the residential areas is significantly high,

whereas

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the others are only quite near to each other in the surveyed year.

On the other hand

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, a house, bathroom and garden are recorded to head the list

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with, the pie chart illustrates the amount of

water

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consumption by the given establishment. Residential is the highest averaging 70%

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Industrial and Business are near to each other averaging 11% and 10%

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, government

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usage consists 6% and it is time two higher than others that average only 3% Looking in detail, the residential area consists of a bathroom and garden that consumes about 27% and 28% of

water

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whereas

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, washing clothes and toilet consumption is about 35% in total.

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, the kitchen is the least, averaging only 10%

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, residential houses consume a huge amount of

water

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because of the chores needed to be done.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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