In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ homes once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a house with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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large number of countries across the world, youngsters make up their minds to move out
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their parent's house after they graduate. they either live on their own or with roommates. I believe
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trend has both bad and good impacts on youths. On the one hand, young
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who leave their
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' place to live with their friends or by themselves could be a risk as they might go through hard situations
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as lack of money, catch some bad behaviours from their friends or get exploited by strangers.
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, they
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abandon
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who have sacrificed their money and time to raise them.
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, some youngsters who live away from their
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can't meet their needs
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up taking loans.
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,
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development could be a bad experience for most young
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who can't handle it.
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,
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trend could be a good experience because it teaches youths to be more independent
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of being dependent on their families. If young
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know how to handle
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life without their
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, they will survive in their future easily.
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developed countries,
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once they have turned 19 years old,
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live alone and support themselves financially.
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of the day,
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who have their own life apart from their
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,
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might gain a solid experience in their life. In conclusion, In several countries, youths are tending to have
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separated
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away from their
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families
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houses and they prefer to live on their own or with their friends and I believe that
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this
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trend has advantages, it has disadvantages.
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