The bar chart illustrates the estimated number of visitors from three different realms to four places including Roma, Marid, Paris, and Liverpool in the year 2018.

The bar chart illustrates the estimated number of visitors from three different realms to four places including Roma, Marid, Paris, and Liverpool in the year 2018.
The bar chart illustrates the estimated
number
of
visitors
from three different realms to four places including Roma, Marid, Paris, and Liverpool in the year 2018.
It is clear that
while
Marid is expected to be the most attractive destination, the opposite is true for Liverpool.
In addition
,
visitors
from the USA account for the highest
number
in four different regions. As can be seen from the chart, 100
thousand
tourists coming from the USA are expected to visit Marid, compared with only 80 and around 70
thousand
ones from Canada and Mexico respectively.
In contrast
, there is a downward trend in the
number
of
visitors
to Liverpool in 2008. Particularly, the
number
of American travellers stands at around 50
thousand
, which is twice as many as that of Canadian ones, at only 25
thousand
. The estimated figure for Mexico is much lower; just only 18
thousand
tourists. Regarding the remaining cities, 80
thousand
American travellers paid for a visit to Rome, followed by around 50
thousand
visitors
from Canada. Meanwhile, the predicted figure for
visitors
from Mexico is just one-quarter of America's travellers.
In addition
, the figure for tourists paying a visit to Paris is expected to be equal, over 50
thousand
from each country.
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