the bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years

the bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years
The bar chart mentioned above compares and contrasts the data in the changes in the old resident proportion from 65 or over, surveyed over a fifty-year period between 1980 and 2030, measured in percentages Generally speaking, the
rates
of old people in the three countries
also
experience a rise during that time.
To begin
with, when the
rates
of Canadian citizens over 65 are taken into consideration. It is clearly seen that there is an upward trend in the total numbers. In detail, at the beginning
in
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1980, the proportion reached 10% and in the next 20 years, the percentage increased by 5% to 15% in 2000.
Also
, in the
last
given period ( in 2030),
this
trend still will grow up from 15% to over 22%
On the other hand
, looking at the portion of old people surveyed in Germany, we can obviously find that the old people
rates
rose gradually during the surveyed years. For more details, 15% was for 1980 before there was an additional 5% in the next 2 decades.
Finally
, more increase of 5% will be witnessed in 2030.
Lastly
, in the UK, there is a slight growth in the elderly resident
rates
. From the starting time, it accounted for nearly 15% and
at the end
, the proportion will be approximately 20% in 2030
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