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The table and bar chart show how journey times in a city centre changed after improvements were made to the transport network, and the costs of using different forms of transport in the city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and bar chart show how journey times in a city centre changed after improvements were made to the transport network, and the costs of using different forms of transport in the city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about approximate trip times in a city centre fixed after changes were implemented to the transportation system. The bar chart represents data about
cost
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the cost
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 per kilometre for different types of
transport
. The most expensive type of
transport
 is
taxi
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a taxi
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 with
the
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a
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 cost of 1.80
euro
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euros
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 per kilometre. Even though, it is the fastest way of getting around the city with only 12 minutes after improvements
has
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 been made. Another way of
traveling
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travelling
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 fast is driving a car. Despite the biggest increase in journey times it still remains the second place in spending
time
 on travel. The cheapest way of transportation is taking a ride on a bus. The cost of the kilometre is 0,40
euro
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euros
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,
however
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 it is the slowest
transport
.
Event
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Even
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 after improvements when
bus
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the bus
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 got faster by 5 minutes the total journey
time
 is 23 minutes. Tram is another type of
transport
that is
 economical.
This
 form of public
transport
also
 became much faster and it seen that the biggest improvements
has
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 been made
for
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to
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 trams.
Overall
, the fastest ways of travelling are
taxi
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taxis
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 and
car
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cars
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, but at the same
time
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,time
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 they are the most expensive. Bus and tram are slower
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than
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that
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than
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 other vehicles,
however
 the
time
 of transportation was reduced and they are more economical compared to car and taxi
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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