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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There are various attitudes when it comes to whether
students
 are free to study anything
that is
 based on their interests or only to major in some useful
subjects
.
Although
 some people believe that only certain
subjects
 should be learned, I would argue that university
students
 should be given the opportunity to choose what they would like to learn. It is undeniable that some key
subjects
,
such
 as mathematics, physics and chemistry, are more likely to be beneficial than other
subjects
, including art and music.
This
 is because those
subjects
 can equip
students
 with skill sets that are needed in future high-tech-related occupations.
Therefore
, not only
students
 will benefit from getting decent and lucrative jobs, the technological and economic growth can
also
 be reached as the development of the whole society can be underpinned by the influx of talent.
However
, if
students
 cannot choose things they really like, the learning process will become monotonous and boring, which is neither interesting nor appealing. Only when
students
 can choose their preferred areas of study can they devote both time and vigour and
finally
 become passionate about those fields.
This
 can help those
students
 to build expertise in their professions and fully achieve their potential.
Moreover
, in
this
 ever-changing society, it is hard to predict which area of knowledge will be the most useful in the future, so making choices based on one’s interest can help him/her to stand out and find a foothold in the competitive labour market no matter what will happen. In conclusion,
while
 it is sensible for universities to focus only on the most useful
subjects
, I am a supporter of the current system in which people have the right to study whatever they like.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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