The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
The graphs reveal the total
income
of
of
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Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
and bananas being sold from 1999 to 2004. It shows
Switzerland
had the highest
income
from
coffee
in 1999 and
then
it change to
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in 2004. In
bananas
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sales
table,
UK
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hold
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the highest profit for over 5 years. In 1999,
Switzerland
stood at the top in selling
coffee
with
the
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profit
about
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3
millions
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of
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euros
while
Sweden had
a
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disastrous
sales
only
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0.8
millions
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euros
. But in 2004,
Switzerland
only doubled
the
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sales
with
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6
millions
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euros
and had
been
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passed by
UK
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with
outstanding
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result of 20
millions
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million
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euros
. Come
to
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Denmark in 1999,
this
country had 1.8
millions
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euros
from
coffee
sales
only placed after
Switzerland
and it not had any significant
changed
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in the next 5 years. Same with Belgium and Sweden with the
income
not even passed 1
millions
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. In banana
sales
,
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hold the highest
income
with 15 million
euros
while
Belgium only had 0.6
millions
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at
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1999. Over 5 years,
UK
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still hold the first place with
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47
millions
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million
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euros
of banana
sales
higher than
sale
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the sale
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of other countries combined. In
this
year,
Switzerland
had
also
increased
it
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income
5 times to reach 5.5
millions
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and Belgium stood in the middle with 4 million
euros
. And two other countries
were
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Sweden and Denmark had to take a severe drop in banana
sale
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sales
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with each
countries
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dropped
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at
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an
approximately
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number of
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1 million
euros
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, coffee, switzerland, uk, sales, millions, euros with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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