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The three pie charts give the details of transition of expenditure collected by local government in Someland each year in terms of 6 important categories over the period in question.

The three pie charts give the details of transition of expenditure collected by local government in Someland each year in terms of 6 important categories over the period in question.
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The three pie charts give the details of
transition
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the transition
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 of expenditure collected by
local
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the local
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 government in Someland each year in terms of 6 important categories over the period in question.
It is clear that
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 Someland authorities spent the largest proportion of their budget on higher education in all given years.
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, the least spending was on other things. The outgoing for higher education accounted for 45% in 1990 and the figures for
this
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 category were 35% in 1980 and 40% by the time 2000.
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, the expenditure on K-12 Education shows 25% in 1980 and it stood at twenty per cent in 1980 and accounted for 18 per cent in 2000. The figures were relatively similar with health and human resources, 14%, 20% and 10% respectively.The local authorities spent
the
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 large amount of money on transportation, these stood at 16%, 6% and 22% over the period.The government spent on environmental services approximately half more
that
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than
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 other things. The
last
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 realm was
other
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spending proves the least popular items.

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