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The graph demonstrates the number of houses in two cities, namely Derby and Nottingham between 2000 and 2009.

The graph demonstrates the
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 of
houses
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 in two cities, namely Derby and Nottingham between 2000 and 2009.
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, the total
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 of Derby’s
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 climbed enormously,
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 the total
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 of Nottingham’s
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 is mild fluctuations. Examining the
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 of
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 built in Derby, it is discovered that the
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 in Derby increased from under 50 in 2000 to above 100 in 2003 and remained unchanged at more than 100
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 from 2003 to 2007.
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 it continuously rose to approximately 350 in 2009. Considering the
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 of
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built in Nottingham, the data indicates that slightly grew from 50 in 2000 to over 50 in 2001.
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 it slowed down rapidly and went up to less than 100 in 2005. The
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 of
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 in Nottingham fell again and fluctuated to 250 in 2009. In conclusion, from everything I said above that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. In my opinion, to some
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 extent, I strongly agree with
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 point.

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