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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevants.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevants.
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The given diagram illustrates
average
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the average
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carbon
dioxide
 (
CO 2
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CO2
) emitted by each person in the United
Kingdom
,
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. First of all, there is a high
carbon
dioxide
is
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apply
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released in
United
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the United
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Kingdom
 than the other countries in 1967. As a difference, Portugal was the lowest
carbon
dioxide
 emission. In 1977,
Sweden
 and
United
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the United
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Kingdom
 were
the
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at the
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 same level of
carbon
dioxide
.
Likewise
,
Sweden
 and Portugal
were
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emitted
CO 2
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CO2
 equally.
United
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The United
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Kingdom
 emitted 11 times of
carbon
dioxide
 than Portugal in 1967. In 2007,
UK
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the UK
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 was almost 2 times of Portugal.
Although
United
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the United
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Kingdom
 emitted the highest level of
carbon
dioxide
 in 1967, it
was
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slightly rise
from1967
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from 1967
 to 2007. Portugal was
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at the
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the
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its
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 lowest level in 1967, it was steadily upward and never drop.
Similarly
, Italy
also
 slowly raised from 1967 to 2007. Both these two countries were the same similar pattern I n1967 to 2007.
Overall
,
UK
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the UK
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 was the highest emission among the other countries but it steadily decline in the graph. Italy and Portugal
were gradually go
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gradually went
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 up.
Sweden
 sharply rise in 1937 and rapidly plunged until 1937.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, kingdom, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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