The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.
The chart illustrates three segments’
contribution
to India’s gross domestic product in 40 years period
from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
, the contribution
of the agriculture section had the
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contribution
at the beginning of the period
but it had a dramatic decrease; however
, the services segment had a significant increase to achieve the largest amount of donation
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donations
at the end
of the period
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At the beginning of the period
, the agricultural contribution
was more than 60% but declined dramatically to about 14% in the year 2000. Although
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contribution
was approximately 17% in 1960 it soared and reached a peak of 63 at the end
of the period
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The industry segment had the lowest proportion at the beginning of the period
about 16% in 1960, it went up slowly until 1980 and then
remain steady until the end of the period
in 2000.Submitted by parianabiloo78 on
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