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The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates information concerning the distribution of computer science subjects studied at a particular university in 2011 by gender.
According to
 the chart, it is evident that a considerable total of admission chose natural science. Both 200 female and male
students
 studied
this
 topic in 2011. Psychology was
also
 a substantially popular major, selected by 200 male admissions and about 170
female
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, respectively.
However
, mathematics was actively researched by men, having 200 male people
while
 only 40 women studied
this
 topic.
In addition
, there was a large difference between the number of people who chose engineering and programming by gender. The numbers of male
students
 were roughly twice the number of female
students
 in these subjects.
In contrast
, linguistics was the only major
that is
 more popular among females than males. More than 100 female
students
 selected
this
 subject, and only approximately 70 males chose it.
Overall
, most computer science subjects were studied by men in 2011, except for linguistics which was selected by more women.
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