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To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and give any relavent examples from your own knowledge or experienc.

Large
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A large
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 number of people thought that
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internet
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the internet
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 was the biggest innovation to human's effortless life in
whole
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time
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. I strongly agree that
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 after
COVID
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the COVID
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 pandemic
time
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, it helped a lot
for
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in
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educational
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the educational
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 and business
field
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fields
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as well as
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 employment.
To begin
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internet
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the internet
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 has undoubtedly
huge
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a huge
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 beneficial impact
in
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on
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 our life. We successfully managed all of
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lecture
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lectures
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also
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seminar
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seminars
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 through
internet
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application
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applications
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 and
site
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sites
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,
such
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 as
zoom
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, google
meet
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. During
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 infection
time
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, We all needed to stay
indoor
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indoors
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, which restricted our school curriculum and activities. Thanks to
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internet
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the internet
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, we can access
to
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apply
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meeting
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the meeting
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room
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rooms
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 and
also
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 can share, attach,
counsel
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and counsel
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 everything to
teacher
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teachers
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,
tutor
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tutors
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 and students. One way, It was
time
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-saving
also
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 educational system
have
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 gone one step
further
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moreover
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 discharged
traditional
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the traditional
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 school system.
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Furthermore
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 outdoor
restriction
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restrictions
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also
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 influenced
shopping
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the shopping
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 of
grocery
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groceries
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, clothing and everything which
necessity
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 to live us.
For
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this
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 reason, online shopping developed and spread more and more.
Secondly
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, after worldwide infection, it seems that some
companies
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company's
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 employer does assignments from home,
instead
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 of working from
workplace
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the workplace
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.
On
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the
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other word,
achievement
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the achievement
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 is
main
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 goal for companies,
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as
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 a result, as long as they doing daily tasks they don't need to go office. It has completely changed
work
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the work
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 industry.
Besides
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 unemployment rate wasn't almost affected by Coronavirus because
of
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apply
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we were avoiding closure
as
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by
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 working from home.
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Otherwise
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 if we keep going to
office
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the office
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, spreading would
increasing
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 dramatically which would
be definitely act
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 on unemployment percentage. In conclusion, online access indeed tackled us from COVID nineteen pandemic
restriction
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restrictions
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 in schooling, operating
business
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businesses
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also
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 job
industry
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industries
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 what is more, gave us opportunities more than we can imagine
in
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at
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this
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time
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also
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 in
future
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the future
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 life.

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