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The future maps below show an industrial area in the twon of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The future maps below show an industrial area in the twon of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
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The given maps illustrate the
comparation
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comparison
 of
Norbiton
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the Norbiton
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 industrial
area
 in the present with the future of planned development in
this
area
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
Norbiton
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Norbiton's
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instrutial
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instructional
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area
 will turn
in to
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into
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residential
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the residential
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area
 where all the factories will
demolished
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in to
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into
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 housing and other facilities. Look at the north, there is a
river
 cross along the
area
 from west to east and
this
river
 will remain unchanged, even though there is a road that will
divided
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 the
river
 in the middle of
area
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the area
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. In the
center
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centre
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 of the maps, there are factories
that
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apply
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located
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are located
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 in the reads and junction. These factories will change
in to
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into
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 seven housing buildings. There will
additional
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be additional
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junction
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junctions
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 that
build
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builds
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 around there. Farmland
also
 will build in the
north east
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northeast
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 of the
river
. The facilities that will build in
this
area
 are shops,
medical
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a medical
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center
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centre
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,
playground
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a playground
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, and
school
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a school
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.
Medical
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The medical
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 center and shops are located in the heart of the town near the junction which is a good location because easy to access. Look at the east
area
, there is a school
in
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on
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 the edge of
road
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the road
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 near the housing, and
playground
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a playground
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also
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is also
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 near that school.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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