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There is a moral necessity today for the richer countries of the world to help the poorer countries develop in terms of feeding the population, education and healthcare.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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No doubt, it is a true fact that developed
nation
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 has all the Services
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 under-developing and developing
nation
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 needs help to improve their condition with the
support
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 of rich
countries
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. Personally , I agree with
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 motion and I shall briefly explain it
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 examples in forthcoming paragraphs. First and foremost , nowadays high economic nations have already all the facilities with proper management
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 poor nations need help from them to maintain everything like education, healthcare and many other things to make their position in
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 world .
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, in my
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, a number of people suffer from hunger and they even do not have any shelter to cover their heads in the bad weather.
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 ,
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 situation can be resolved with the
support
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 of rich
country
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 government if they provide some financial aid to
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nation
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's government.
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 ,wealthy
countries
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 can easily afford the medical care of below the poverty line nations people as these are
countries
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 unable to manage it under their low budget.
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 , it can help to save people's life and the connection between
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 become strong. Probing
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 ,in
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 current time period education plays widely role in everyone's life ,whilst
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 is the only resource which helps to boost the
country
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's economy ,so if the richer
country
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 provides some high qualifications teacher to the poor
nation
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 with numerous equipment which needs in a study like textbooks , notebook and various other items .By
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 , the condition of the
nation
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 automatically rises.To exemplify, nowadays most student move from poor
countries
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 to well-developed
countries
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 for better education and Lifestyle ,
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nonetheless
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 if these things are available in their native place
then
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 they never shift .
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, these types of issues are solved with rich
country
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support
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. In conclusion,
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 poor
countries
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 have a number of problems that can be replaced with the help of well-developed
countries
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 if they provide some financial aid and emotional
support
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 these obstacles are removed from the
nation
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 .
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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