Many people say that globalization and growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

It is said that the environment has a number of negative effectual things
due to
globalization and
increasing
Correct article usage
the increasing
show examples
large
Correct quantifier usage
number of large
show examples
factories. I completely agree with
this
opinion.
Firstly
, the main reason
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
my agreement is that urbanization and multinational companies are polluting the climate these days. Even though these factories do business across the world, globalization is not always beneficial to everyone. Global trade is becoming increasingly international. Some kind of leaders take permission from the government to build an office
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
some places,
because
Correct word choice
and because
show examples
of
this
they cut the trees growing there.
This
situation is
also
related to urban areas. There are only a few plants
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
cities.
However
, the government should not allow to construct a factory on the field where perennial plants are growing.
Secondly
, it is useful that goods are
prodused
Correct your spelling
produced
in one country and sold in many others, but it has a few drawbacks.
For instance
, companies can move to
countryside
Add an article
the countryside
show examples
where labour is cheap.
Consequently
,
this
creates job losses.
Furthermore
, if a manager cannot control the workersʼ safety, they may get sick in
unreliable
Add an article
the unreliable
show examples
surrounding
Fix the agreement mistake
surroundings
show examples
.
For example
, employees working at a farm
Correct pronoun usage
who prodused
show examples
prodused
Correct your spelling
produces
chicken meat could be harmed
from
Change preposition
by
show examples
the bad smell of the hens.
Also
,
this
unpleasant odour spreads over nature.
This
is dangerous for citizens living in rural areas. So businessmen should think about
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
ways which do not harm individuals. In conclusion,
although
globalization is developing nowadays,our nature is suffering from the litter that mills are creating and cutting plants.
Submitted by chartakinnovation on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: