family members and friends caring fotr elderly people find it hard to spend enough time looking after them.what are the causes of this problem?what solutions can you suggest?
The
large number of Change the article
A
people
admitted that it is hard to look after family elderly member
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members
as well as
care
them
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for them
oftenly
. Correct your spelling
often
Personally
I believe Add a comma
,Personally
reason
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the reason
of
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for
this
problem is urbanization
of big cities Add an article
the urbanization
also
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and also
financial
inadequate condition of Add an article
a financial
the financial
majority
. There are few Correct article usage
the majority
solution
to Change to a plural noun
solutions
this
and further
I will explain.
In modern
world, it is undeniable that visiting grandparents for Add an article
the modern
reasonable
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a reasonable
time
is complicated. In last
three Correct article usage
the last
decades
cities are crowded more than ever which Add a comma
,decades
results
biggest companies, departments and universities Add the preposition
inresults
fromresults
placed
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being placed
at
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in
city
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the city
center
, Change the spelling
centre
as a consequence
youngsters tend to live in
downtown Change preposition
apply
on the other hand
older people
want to live in suburban places because of congestion. As a result
, in order to come to their older family member
takes time
. For instance
, in South Korea, Seoul to Busan takes at least 2 hours by train moreover
, come and go
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and-go
time
is roughly 4 to 6 hours. In second
place, Add an article
the second
majority
of Correct article usage
the majority
people
are financially dependent from
their employment, Change preposition
on
on
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in
the
other word, they have to work every single day even Correct article usage
apply
some
of them are working overtime. Correct word choice
though some
This
results young
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in young
people
's overwork which is necessary to live. To put another
way, adults are working too much Correct pronoun usage
it another
also
for
this
reason they want to rest their weekend instead
of visiting family.
To tackle this
issue, government
should implement Add an article
the government
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the law
law
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laws
of
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on
working
environment, Correct article usage
the working
overtime
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and overtime
as well as
action to increase Correct article usage
the economical
economical
state. Replace the word
economic
As a
result
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,result
people
are having enough money and time
to care
their
family Change preposition
for their
member
. Fix the agreement mistake
members
Furthermore
under the government's fund, building nursing home
, Fix the agreement mistake
homes
care
places will be helpful to Correct word choice
and care
people
who can't afford taking
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to take
care
of older people
.
To sum up
, financial condition
and urbanization are Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
reason
that Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
people
can't look after their family member
even if they want to. In order to solve Fix the agreement mistake
members
this
problem government should support economical
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economic
condition
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conditions
also
make nursing places as well. If they would do this
, caring family member
will be no more problem in future.Fix the agreement mistake
members
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