There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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In the current era, there is a controversy about non-academic
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taught at schools which causes a shortage of apprehension about academic
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and should be wiped off. I clearly disagree with
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perspective. As both are boons to the
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's development. It is undisputed that academic
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play a crucial role in
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fast-changing society. The fact that students focus on studying academics brings them solid knowledge about academic fields and achieve high grades.
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, they are able to achieve good student titles, which leads to opportunities to attend a renowned university and get a highly recognized diploma. As a case in point, those who study only academic
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may have difficulty absorbing and feeling dryness
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learning.
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is accompanied by
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developing without creative thinking and activeness which contributes to
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learning just to meet their parent's expectations.
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, non-academic
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as physical education or cookery for
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advance our various practical
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in society. First of all, sports are a good way to develop a personality.
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, it is necessary to learn about competition, cooperation, and good sportsmanship.
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, cooking-related
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at school teach students self-governing
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and how to take care of themselves when there are no adults around.
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,
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as teamwork and creativity are formed during the study process. To illustrate the point, an adolescent who has good academic knowledge but is arrogant and has no team spirit, which gives rise to not
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able to integrate into the community and easily fails.
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, potential companies desire young adults with innovative minds rather than those with only academic qualifications.
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, my own view on the matter is that main
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enhance the academic level,
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non-academic ones provide more independent living
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for students.
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, academic and non-academic
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should be combined to help
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grow the most comprehensively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pressure
  • succeed
  • academically
  • non-academic
  • physical education
  • cookery
  • school syllabus
  • concentrate
  • academic work
  • well-rounded
  • enhancement
  • practical skills
  • balanced education system
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