The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.
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The given pie charts illustrate information about
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common merits and demerits of Bowen Island from surveys of tourists.
It is clear that
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notable visitors say the most common disadvantage is
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the high
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cost of living
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the most common advantage is the people. Looking at
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disadvantages chart
first,
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half of the visitors responded that the high cost of living is the most disadvantage. The second disadvantage
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the entertainment section stood
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quarter of
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chart. Weather and food quality part stood
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%,
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and 10
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% respectively.
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, 42% of visitors responded that the most advantage is the people. Tourists said the second advantage is that the scenery stood at 35%.
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survey, culture and good accommodation were the lowest advantages rated 12% and 11% respectively in Bowen Island.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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