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High job demands, stress and sense of commitment are among the main reasons people go to work when they are ill. This way they accomplish important tasks, but may infect others or get some serious health problems themselves. In your opinion should people go to work if they are sick? Support your point of view with relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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'Health is Wealth' is a common quote we are hearing for centuries, but nowadays, folks give more importance to their
work
.
That is
 why, the upsurging
work
 calls, tensions and devotion towards jobs is the main reason they went to
work
 even if they are not feeling well.
Due to
this
, they complete the crucial
work
,
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 but are harmful to others as it leads to unhealthiness among them. In my ,opinion the masses should not
work
 when they are ill as it can be a serious issue for the other
employees
 working there.
To begin
 with, doing
work
 in unwell conditions lessens the productivity of the respective job. To elaborate, if someone is not well and went for the job, he cannot concentrate well enough on his
work
 and ultimately it affects the progress of the respective
company
. Despite
this
, there are many contagious diseases,
therefore
 it will affect the efficiency of other workers there and definitely the progress of the job. As some communicable diseases spread at a fast pace,
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 other
employees
 get affected by that and will take double the time to accomplish their
work
.
For example
, still after two years of
work
 from home strategy by Rogers
company
 in the USA, during covid-19 outbreak, when the
employees
 get back to their
work
, Carona spread over there
due to
 two
employees
 working there, and it halved the production of the
company
 because the disease spread among 50
employees
 in the single day.
Furthermore
, doing
work
 during one's illness can harm his/her health
also
. As we heard that a small leakage today can turn into a flood if not taken seriously,
similarly
 a small negligence to the disease can lead to a serious problem if it is not taken care of.
For instance
, in 2018, an employee of a Canadian tire warehouse in Brampton
,
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 suffered from a small foot injury. In spite of taking drugs or consulting ,doctors he came regularly to
work
, and
as a result
 of ,
this
 his foot had to be taken away from his body, as it was spreading poison throughout the whole of his body.
Therefore
, one should take the little injuries seriously as they may result in bigger ones.
To conclude
, to
work
 during your illness is definitely wrong as it can affect others, the
company
's progress
as well as
 the person who is suffering from it in a drastic manner.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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