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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

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In
past
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thirty
years
 the number of people who have
car
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a car
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 has expanded worldwide.
Due to
this
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,this
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 there is almost always traffic jam in many countries. I believe that
this
 statement is true, and
this
 essay will discuss how a government can reduce the
car
 consumption of its society. First of all, in
past
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the past
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thirty
years
 technology has developed quickly and
according to
this
development
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,development
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 new
cars
 have
produced
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been produced
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. With
this
 fast production demand
also
 increased and people have begun to buy
cars
 rapidly all around the world.
For instance
, in
Istanbul
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,Istanbul
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 there is a constant traffic jam because the number of
cars
 has extended in the city over the past
thirty
years
.
However
, I believe that governments have
a
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the
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 power to discourage individuals to buy automobiles. One of them
to
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is to
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 improve public
transportation
 systems and make
it
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them
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 affordable or
economic
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economical
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 for citizens. With
this
, individuals might use public
transportation
instead
 of private
cars
.
For example
, in
London
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,London
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 the underground
transportation
 system is highly developed. Everybody can reach every place that s/he wants to. When I go to London as a tourist, I
also
 use
subway
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the subway
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 easily and I can go wherever I want to go. The other
think
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thing
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 that government can do is to increase the price of
the
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apply
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automobiles. I believe that if they can make the
cars
 expensive it could be the biggest
discourage
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discouragement
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.
According to
 recent research, the growth of
car
 owners has decreased in Turkey because of the high prices. In conclusion, I agree that the number of automobile owners has increased significantly over
thirty
years
 and
this
 causes a traffic problem.
Although
, there are several methods that can discourage the population to buy
car
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a car
the car
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. These are improving
public
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the public
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transportation
 system, making it affordable to everyone and increasing the private automobile prices.
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