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The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
The given pie
chart
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 describes information about transportation, and the table
chart
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 shows the reasons
for
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why individuals use the
car
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 in Edmonton city
It is clear that
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 most
of
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the
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people
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 drive
the
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a
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car
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 when they move. We can
also
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 see that a lot of
people
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 use the
car
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 for commuting to work.
According to
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 the pie
chart
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, using cars was the most popular transportation, 45% of
people
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 used private vehicles in the city. Many individuals
also
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 use light rail transit
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35%. buses and taxis were the least popular among the citizens by 10% respectively. Looking at the table
chart
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, we can see that more than 50% of
people
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 used the
car
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 for commuting to work.
Additionally
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, 45% and 40% of
people
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also
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 used private cars for business and taking their children to school. The lowest
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people
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number of people
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 used
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car
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cars
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 for leisure activities and for shopping by 15% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, car, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • public transportation
  • cultural attitudes
  • electric vs. traditional vehicles
  • peak hours
  • environmental implications
  • economic factors
  • socio-economic divide
  • technological advancements
  • public policy
  • environmental awareness
  • urban development
  • air quality
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • government initiatives
  • community actions
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