The pie charts illustrate the comparison of the water consumption in three fields (household, industry and agriculture) in San Diego County, California and the rest of the world.
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The pie charts illustrate the comparison of
the
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water
consumption in three fields (household, industry and agriculture
) in San Diego County, California and the rest of the world.
Overall
, the water
consumption of households in the two
US cities occupies a significant figure than that of industrial and agriculture
portions. Meanwhile, the worldwide Replace the word
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agriculture
water
usage is noticeable as the highest proportion which is a dominant figure than that used by other
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the other
two
sectors.
The water
used by the residential area in San Diego County makes up a significant rate at 60% that
drops to approximately half at 39% in California. Correct pronoun usage
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consumption in industry is witnessed as a second high-rank proportion in the two
American religions, at 23% in San Diego and 33% in California respectively. The
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usage in agricultural area
just accounts for the smallest amount,
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On the other hand
, a dramatic proportion of water
is consumed by international agriculture
, which occupies two thirds
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In addition
, the tiniest fraction of water
usage at 8% is used by the worldwide domestic sector. The water
used by industry reaches 23%.Submitted by joyce.ta213 on
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