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The diagram shows the life cycle of a Monarch Butterfly.

The diagram shows the life cycle of a Monarch Butterfly.
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The given picture illustrates the various stages in the life of a
Monarch
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 Butterfly.
Overall
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, there are main 7 stages in the life cycle of a
Monarch
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 Butterfly, beginning with the laying of
eggs
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 and ending with the final stage as the adult butterfly. The first step of the whole cycle is marked with
eggs
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 that are laid by a
Monarch
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 butterfly on the leaves.
Then
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, these
eggs
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 hatch and larvae emerge. In the next step, larvae hang and cover themselves with the thread. When covered completely, it becomes a chrysalis. In
the following step is
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 that the young butterfly emerges from the chrysalis and it destroys the thread. After a period of time, the young butterfly develops and becomes to be mature. At the
last
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 stage, an adult butterfly – known
a
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as a
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Monarch
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 Butterfly is ready to lay
eggs
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. The whole life of a butterfly is ready
to begin
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 again.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words monarch, eggs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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