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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent to do you agree?

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Many
people
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 believe that
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better
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 to use
to
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local
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people
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people's
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culture
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 and their
costom
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customer
 service so we can use
to
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apply
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them but
other
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others
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 believe that it is not necessary
for
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to learn
local
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the local
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life style
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lifestyle
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 because we are living here.
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rule
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a rule
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 for us to obey, it
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depand
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depends
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human
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humans
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 own will
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whether
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 they will
apopt
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adopt
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countrys
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countries
country
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essay
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i
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discusee
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discuss
the
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both view point until we reach the
conclusation
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conclusion
.
Culture
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 in every
country
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do
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does
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 not work
same
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the same
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away
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way
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, it is totally different if you see the
prospective
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perspective
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 of different countries. When
people
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travels
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travel
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 to
other
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another country
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country
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 for study, work or for vacation, some
peple
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people
 try to learn the
culture
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 and
treadition
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tradition
traditions
 of
this
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country
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whome
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whom
 they visit, it
is
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apply
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somehow
have
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 a
posative
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positive
 effect
for
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on
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 the
traveler
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traveller
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 who
get
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gets
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 to match the local
people
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there
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their
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 tradition, especially international students and worker who come
other
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another country
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country
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 for there own need, they will get along better than other
people
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 who do not want to adopt other
countrys
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countries
country's
country
culture
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. For
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culture
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about culture
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for
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to
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 some extent, that help you to get
alone
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along
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local
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with local
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people
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 and not feel
boring
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 or homesick.
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, it is not
compolcery
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compulsory
 for you to learn the customise
in
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of
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 other
countrys
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countries
, it
is not make
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does not make
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 you
hatere
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here
hate
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people
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 and
there
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their
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culture
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, it is just that you
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do not think
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 it is necessary for you to learn
there
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their
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customery
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customary
customer
.There are some Juvinol who go abroad and
forgate
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forget
 about his own
culture
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 to
apopt
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adopt
post
ther
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the
country
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 they visit,
for
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reason
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is affect
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affects
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people
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people's
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 own
culture
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 and
there
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their
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 own regulation.
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, lots of children and
Juvinal
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Juvenal
 who go to study in
other
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another country
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country
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, totally
forgate
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forget
forgot
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custome
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customers
 to learn about other
culture
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 and their language. It is not good for
people
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 to
forgate
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forget
 about their own nation
aunthim
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anthem
. In
conculation
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consultation
, we can
said
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say
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 that it is ok for
people
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 to learn other
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people
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people's
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 customs and
there
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their
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regulation
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regulations
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 but that does not mean that it is necessary
for
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apply
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to learn, how to do that, we can adopt other
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people
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people's
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 custome but it is dependent on the
people
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 views how she think
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 matters.
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