Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent to do you agree?

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people
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believe that
,
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it is
batter
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better

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to use
to
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apply

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local
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people
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culture
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and their
costom
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customer

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service so we can use
to
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them but
other
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others

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believe that it is not necessary
for
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apply

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to learn
local
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the local

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life style
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lifestyle

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because we are living here.
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some extent, I believe that it is not
rule
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a rule

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for us to obey, it
is
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depand
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depends

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on
human
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humans

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own will
wether
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whether

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they will
apopt
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adopt

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other
countrys
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countries
country

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ideas. In
this
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essay
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i
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I

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will
discusee
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discuss

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the
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both view point until we reach the
conclusation
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conclusion

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.
Culture
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in every
country
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do
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does

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not work
same
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the same

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away
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way

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, it is totally different if you see the
prospective
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perspective

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of different countries. When
people
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travels
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travel

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to
other
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another country
other countries

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country
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for study, work or for vacation, some
peple
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try to learn the
culture
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and
treadition
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tradition
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of
this
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country
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whome
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whom

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they visit, it
is
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somehow
have
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has

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a
posative
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positive

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effect
for
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on

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the
traveler
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traveller

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who
get
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to match the local
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with
there
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their

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tradition, especially international students and worker who come
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for there own need, they will get along better than other
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who do not want to adopt other
countrys
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countries
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culture
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. For
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view, it is better to learn
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culture
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about culture

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some extent, that help you to get
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and not feel
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or homesick.
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, it is not
compolcery
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for you to learn the customise
in
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countrys
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, it
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you
hatere
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for other
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and
there
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culture
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, it is just that you
are not think
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it is necessary for you to learn
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customery
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customary
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.There are some Juvinol who go abroad and
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about his own
culture
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to
apopt
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adopt
post

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ther
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country
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they visit,
for
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this
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reason
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it
is affect
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affects

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people
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people's

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own
culture
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and
there
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own regulation.
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, lots of children and
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Juvenal

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who go to study in
other
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another country
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country
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, totally
forgate
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forget
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about their own
custome
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to learn about other
culture
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and their language. It is not good for
people
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to
forgate
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forget

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about their own nation
aunthim
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. In
conculation
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, we can
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that it is ok for
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to learn other
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people
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customs and
there
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regulation
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regulations

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but that does not mean that it is necessary
for
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to learn, how to do that, we can adopt other
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people
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custome but it is dependent on the
people
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views how she think
this
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