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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

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In the modern world,
private
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car
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 has increased so dramatically over the past 30 years that increased levels of
traffic
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 in several cities in the world. From my perspective,
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 statement is true. I strongly think that there are many reasons to decrease using individual
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car
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 that government should have measures and the following examples will be provided in order to support my point of view. One of the most important reasons why people increased using an
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car
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 is that using
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a private
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car
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 is more convenient to
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 or travel.
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, if they want to go somewhere, they have the authority to travel anywhere, anytime, they want
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 taking public transport leads to more time than it.
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, public transport is not convenient for people who have children. Another reason to support
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 is the fact that today, the price of a
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 is cheaper than 30 years ago.
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 the fact that It makes they can perchance easily. These
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personal
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car
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 plays a major role in
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 of
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 jams. One of the best approaches
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 can take in
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 city is to encourage the
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 from
home
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.
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 the latest research conducted by Bangkok University, it was revealed that
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work
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 from
home
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 can reduce
traffic
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jam
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. When employees
work
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 from
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, they don’t have to commute to and from the office.
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 leads to a significant reduction in the number of vehicles on the road during rush hours, which in turn helps alleviate
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 congestion. In conclusion, I would like to say that I strongly believe that the ownership of cars,
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traffic
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 congestion has increased in recent years.
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, I
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 think that the government should encourage people to
work
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 from
home
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