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Some people think employers should not care about the way their employees dress, but the quality of work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For a long time,
people
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 wore specific types of clothing to
work
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 to show respect towards their employer and their job. Nowadays, wearing a uniform became a less serious concern in many firms,
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 productivity at
work
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 is the most important indicator of an employee.
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 some may argue that
people
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 should get back to previous customs of wearing a uniform, I believe
employees
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 should feel free to
work
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 in a type of clothing they like.
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 with, productivity and efficiency of
work
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 is undoubtedly the most important criterion defining the success of a company. Firms should actively encourage the comfort of their
employees
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 since efficiency is high when
people
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 feel comfortable in their position.
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,
people
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 rarely want to wear uniforms and rather prefer more practical clothes that do not interfere with their
work
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.
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, programmers prefer to wear free pants, since they need to sit in front of a computer for a long time,
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 managers wish to appear in formal clothes since those add few points to their authority.
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, companies imposing certain types of clothing on their staff only worsen the comfortable atmosphere of a workplace.
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,
employees
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 should be given the freedom to choose their wardrobe for
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,
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 of compromising on existing requirements.
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, imposing a certain dress code at
work
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 ensures the absence of discrimination.
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 means that
people
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 will not judge their colleagues based on clothing preferences.
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, the implementation of dressing requirements raises another social issue - the lack of freedom.
People
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 who do not feel a sense of democracy at
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 do not build a high loyalty to their managers and in a more general sense, to their company.
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, strict uniform rules may only increase the rate at which
employees
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 abandon their workplace. In conclusion, giving freedom of clothing is crucial for maintaining high performance at the workplace,
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, more companies should consider implementing a free dress code for their
employees
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.
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