Some people think that physical strength is more important fi for success in sport, while others think that mental strength is mort important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion .

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The most important factor in
sports
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is mental
strength
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some
people
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agree with that statement,
while
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others think that physical
strength
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is a key point to being successful in
sports
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.
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both opinions are particularly true. First of all, in most types of
sports
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physical power is necessary for success and can be able to
show
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results. The body of
people
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can make anything with good preparation. Because of that physical quality is important.
Secondly
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, without
well-trained
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a well-trained
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trainedtrained
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trained trained
trained-trained
body
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body,
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sportsmen can not move fastly.
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, footballers should train every day to
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the expected results in the match. Or boxers should run and train
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their endurance for a fight. Because of that sportsmen should have well physical
strength
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.
On the other hand
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, mental
strength
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is a reason for having physical
strength
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, because without
well
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good
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quality and , discipline sportsmen cannot have well
trained
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well-trained
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, endurance body that they need to succeed in
sports
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.
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, it is hard to run 20
kilometers
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kilometres
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without discipline, or it is hard to train football for 3 hours without mental aim and discipline.The next factor is, in personal
sports
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such
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us
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as
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, boxing, wrestling, swimming, table tennis or Judo, it is hard to
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physical power if you
scored
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score
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your opponent. Because of that successful sportsman is mentally strong.
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in stressful
situations
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situations,
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mental
strength
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people
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can be more productive.
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, boxers could
scered
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serve
their opponent but they do not
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it because of mental
strength
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. To summarise, I particularly agree with both opinions but without mental ,power
people
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cannot have physical
strength
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.
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