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Despite a large number of gyms, a sedentary lifestyle is gaining popularity in the contemporary world. What problems are associated with this? What solutions can you suggest? excitement

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The United Nations Educational, Scientific and Cultural Organization (UNESCO) designates World
Heritage
Sites
 of outstanding universal value to cultural or natural
heritage
 which have been nominated by signatories to the 1972 UNESCO World
Heritage
 Convention.[1] Cultural
heritage
 consists of monuments (
such
 as architectural works, monumental sculptures, or inscriptions), groups of buildings, and
sites
 (including archaeological
sites
). Natural features (consisting of physical and biological formations), geological and physiographical formations (including habitats of threatened species of animals and plants), and natural
sites
 which are important from the point of view of science, conservation or natural beauty, are defined as natural
heritage
.[2] Cambodia ratified the convention on 28 November 1991.[3] As of 2022, Cambodia has three
sites
 on the
list
. Angkor was listed in 1992 when the country was briefly governed by the United Nations mission after the Cambodian–Vietnamese War, in line with the 1991 Paris Peace Agreements. The site was immediately placed on the
List
 of World
Heritage
 in Danger in order to quickly and efficiently deal with urgent problems of conservation.[4] In 2004, Angkor was removed from the endangered
list
.[5] The Temple of Preah Vihear was listed in 2008 and the Sambor Prei Kuk temple complex in 2018.[3] All three
sites
 are cultural.
In addition
, Cambodia has eight
sites
 on its tentative
list
.[3]
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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