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Animal testing has become one of the most discussed topics at present. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this experimentation.

#topics #experimentation
Involving living creatures in scientific
experements
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experiments
 always had a common practice,
however
, it
still
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most
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 doubtful issue in
a
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many discussions. Clearly, making
researches
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research
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 on
animals
 are prevent
people
 from
threat
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threats
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for
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 their health and brings more accurate results.
Nevertheless
, there are some drawbacks, that could be mentioned in
such
 practices.
Firstly
, testing different products on
animals
 is definitely
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 and essential step before releasing
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them
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 on
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 market. A lot of
people
 are buying different goods and even can not imagine which effects it can
brings
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 on their
body
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bodies
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.
In addition
, most
of
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items
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 for babies, especially, healthcare and toiletry, must be
experemented
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experimented
experienced
 on living creatures before, as children are urgent and not accounted for products that their
parent
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parents
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 buy for them.
Secondly
, researches on
animals
 usually give more correct data, than
another kind
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other kinds
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 of testing.Nowadays society still can not
afford
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 refuse from using
animals
 in
experements
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experiments
, because their participation really helps scientists make more
provent
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proven
 and accurate results,
furthemore
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furthermore
, improve
quality
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the quality
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 of goods and increase the rate of faith of potential
client
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clients
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.
On the other hand
, despite
of
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effectiveness, the researches like
this
 have
their
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 own fee.First of all,
implication
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living
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of living
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 creatures in
testing
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the testing
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 process is completely cruel and immoral.
Animals
 are not responsible to suffer only
due to
 egocentric beliefs and
own
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the own
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 interests of
people
. Another disadvantage is that a lot of alternative ways of testing products
are
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exist and
people
 are not limited by
number
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a number
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 of opportunities. Contemporary society
have
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 already
have
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developed science infrastructure, which
afford
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making
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researches
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research
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 on cells and even plants.
Moreover
,
people
 should be accountable for
decisions
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 that they do, hire a team of volunteers would be even more
humanely
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instead
killing
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of killing
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animals
 or inflicting them hurt. In conclusion, cruelness and
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the acessibility
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acessibility
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accessibility
 of alternative options are the downsides of
hermlessness
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homelessness
harmlessness
 for
people
’s health and effectiveness. If corporations become more accountable for their choices and will test their
production
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products
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 only when it is
definetely essencial
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definitely essential
, more
animals
 will live
peacifull
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peaceful
peacefully
 life without any
sorrows
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sorrow
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.
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