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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .
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The Pictorial Picture represents the mean emissions of
the
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carbon dioxide per individual in
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Europe From the span of 40 years between 1967 and 2007 in
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meteric
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metric
meteoric
Tonnes
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. From 1967 to 1987
the
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portugal
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 release harmful gas nearly around 3
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meteric
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tonnes
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while
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 on the other side
of
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itlay
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 emits around 6
tonnes
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 from 1967 to 1977,
thereafter
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 the emission from the
portugal
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 goes up and down from
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1977 to 2007,
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however
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 the itlay footprints
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flutuating
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fluctuating
 over the same period of
portugal
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. On the other side of
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Europe
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europe
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 the United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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 and the
sweden
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 hit the highest emission among the four countries in the whole
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europe
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. Sweden was at peak around 9
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meteric
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tonnes
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 from 1967 to 1977,
neverthless
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 fall
steepdown
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step down
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 from the 1977 to 2007 end at same as
portugal
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. Meanwhile the UK has the highest emission in 1967 around 11
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meteric
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tonnes
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 and gradually slammed to 9
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meteric
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tonnes
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 in 2007 over the span of 40 years.
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