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Some people feel that the government should pay the costs of running universities so that a university education will be free for anyone who wants it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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‏There has been debate about public money disbursement on education at colleges without any fees for pupils who are interested or not . In the forthcoming paragraph, I shall discuss both views and explain why ‏I completely agree with the former viewpoint . ‏ ‏On the one hand, having free teaching allows huge opportunities for all ‏people
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 different financial levels, ‏especially individuals who suffer from poverty . As an example, universities in Saudi Arabia for free if they are inhabitants anyone with a high degree ‏
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 in after-school learning can have the chance.
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 he or she proves themselves to have the opportunity.resulted on
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 and ambitions ‏. In terms of justice,all people have the same right
of learning
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. ‏
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, there is no discrimination in order to maintain the country.
overall
, based on the above discussion. I
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 that the funds of government must
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 on education to improve society on many levels. ‏
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society and has long-term effects ‏
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 the ‏country after graduation
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 of the most ‏
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. ‏
Moreover
, the educational community have awareness and development better than other community.
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, the crime rate will decrease because high educational society ,
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 folk with no meaningful reason in life and no money. ‏
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 other words, will destroy the country ‏
for instance
, brilliant students without income lead them
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 and waste their brains
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. ‏ ‏ All in all,
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 many countries pay to learn others have
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free schooling to develop their country and to have the same rights without distinction and I entirely agree .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government funding
  • equitable education system
  • social mobility
  • talented individuals
  • higher education
  • prioritize
  • sustainable
  • alternative sources of funding
  • partnerships with businesses
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