With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

I do find that as health care has improved all other
technology
and have been
also
developed to make life easier, especially for those with some kind of limit.
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essay will discuss whether society is ready to bear the increase of elders. Today,
technology
has been very helpful in every area of life, that way it eased young and old life. So even though the number of elders has been growing substantially,
the
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society is capable to support all these elderly people,
using
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this
technology
offer.
For instance
, robots made of artificial intelligence might assist them the whole day for every simple and little complex routine activity.
Besides
services are
also
getting better every day. Nowadays there are many types of services that have made transportation, shopping delivery, and communication much easier for everyone.
Therefore
the way to manage even better
this
upward tendency in elder
number
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is to use efficiently all
this
technology
and facilities in order to give elderly people mobility with independence
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other person
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.
That is
why it is possible to affirm that as long as health care has improved
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years
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, other facilities and
technology
have
also
supportively improved. Conclusively, society is able to cope with the increase of elderly people caused by health care improvement, for its
technology
and service developments
along
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the years.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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