Some people believe school children should help to create rules their schools. Others say teacher alone should decide what the rules are. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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others believe
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teacher
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alone should decide the
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statement.
This
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essay will
demonstrates
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the sights of both
perception
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perceptions

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with examples and
then
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share my opinion. On the one hand, take topics
regardig
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regarding

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student
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, If
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student
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make laws
what
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the
rules
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are,
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student
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wil
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increase some skills
such
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as decision power, communication level, and mental thinking,
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, If we give the chance for made
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for
children
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they will thinking, research and for
this
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activities
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thier
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brain power will more accurate.
Moreover
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,
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the student
a student
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the student
a student

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student
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also
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learn
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learns

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how to make
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decision
decisions

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, so in the
future
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it would be
great
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help.
Furthermore
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, in some bad
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may
student
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go wrong trend,
such
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as
fight
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with someone for making
leader
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or
others
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things.
On the other hand
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,
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teacher
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the teacher
a teacher

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should learn
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student
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students

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that
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apply

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how to make
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a desicion
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desicion
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decision
decisions
for
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,
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teacher
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the teacher
a teacher

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should give
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an idea
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an idea

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idea
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for making
rules
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,
for example
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, If
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student
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a student

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do
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does

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made
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some
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wrong decision which not good for another life,
then
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teacher
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the teacher

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be assist
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them.
Moreover
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, The
rules
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are understanding, mature and good which has been made by
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the teacher
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,
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teacher
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the teacher
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is adult they
have
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sense, as well
have
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an
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experience. In my opinion,
while
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it is precious to give
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to
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for voice note for making
decision
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, it made rest for
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,
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student
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once
started
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take
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skills ultimately
teacher
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need to encourage
to
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the
children
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. In conclusion, both
person
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people

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should deserve for making
rules
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, but for
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students
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students

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student
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teachers need to make
thier
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second hand for taking good
dicison
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decision
decisions
division

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due to
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