Some people believe school children should help to create rules their schools. Others say teacher alone should decide what the rules are. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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to create
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schools,
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alone should decide the
rules
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the sights of both
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share my opinion. On the one hand, take topics
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, If
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make laws
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the
rules
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wil
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will
increase some skills
such
as decision power, communication level, and mental thinking,
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also
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how to make
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it would be
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help.
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with someone for making
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or
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things.
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,
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should learn
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itself
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should give
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for making
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wrong decision which not good for another life,
then
teacher
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should
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them.
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, The
rules
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however
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make
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sense, as well
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experience. In my opinion,
while
it is precious to give
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to
children
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,
student
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take
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decisions
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their
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the
children
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should deserve for making
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students
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student
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teachers need to make
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their
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decision
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